上海中考英语作文范文分析ppt课件

1、上海中考英语作文,范文分析 2009-2019,上海中考英语作文总分为20分,1.内容分8分。内容切题，意思连贯，表达清楚完整。 2.语言分8分。用语规范，表达准确，无或少见语法错误，词汇拼写正确，句型使用恰当。首先是字数，少于60字的作文要酌情扣分。 3.组织结构分4分。文采分，根据使用复杂句型/单词和谚语/俗语的情况来加分,A档 1815分 B档 14.512分 C档 11.58分D档 3.50分,每少5个词扣0.5分， 拼写错误每处扣0.5分， 标点，大小写错误每2处扣0.5分 内容和语言表达总分达15分及以上，得23分 内容和语言总分1314分，如确有好句型或表达用语，可酌情给12分

2、通篇句型，句式单一，词汇贫乏者，即使无语法错误，也不给分 开头句+给的几个参考点+结尾句+亮点。 然后再仔细批阅看有否语法错误,最后给出总分,1. 内容空洞，没有清晰的思路，表达能力不强，总是用一些不合适的句子内容来表达，所以可能让老师觉得理由或是内容太假，当然也就得不了高分。 2. 议论过多，描写不足。大多数情况下，我们把议论当成的作文的重点，所以常常会跑题。应当多描述提示的内容或加以想像，不能只翻译了事。 3. 总是使用同一个主语写句子，重复太多。尽量使用不同的主语来表达，比如：I must learn English well. 就可以换成：It is important for me

3、to learn English well. 4. 结构散漫，想哪儿写哪儿，乱七八糟。应该使用总分或总分总的结构。 5. 都是简单句，缺少复合句。多用状语从句，宾语从句，定语从句及一些重要的句型，可以用被动语态。 6. 连词的使用较少，句子之间的连接很生硬。可以加入一些：比如: to my surprise (让我惊讶的是), whats more（而且，还有）等，让上文与下文衔接更紧密。意思也能更流畅地表达,常见问题,2009命题作文 Write at least 60 words about the topic “I want to do something for my school”.

4、 (以“我想为学校做件事”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。) (注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。) Use the following points as a reference. (以下内容仅供参考) l. What do you want to do for your school? 2. Why do you want to do it? 3. How are you going to do it,I want to make school clean.You may think it is very simple.But I dont t

5、hink so.Our teacher said,School is your home,you should keep it clean.But I have never done anything to make school clean.For example,I have never told my classmate to pick up rubbish after he threw it on the ground.I also threw the rubbish on the ground.So I want to make school clean so that everyo

6、ne can forgive me.During this summer holiday,I will go to school to make school clean.Of course,I will do it with my classmates.We will make school clean every weekends next term as well.Now,do you think it is simple,2010命题作文 上海中考英语作文题:Im proud of myself 1、What kind of person are you? 2、What makes y

7、ou proud of yourself(Give an example/examples) 3、Why are you proud of yourself? 要求：至少60字,I am a boy of less confidence. I always hate running. But as we all know, the students of Grade nine have to take part in the sports exam. At that moment, I just wanted to give up. But my parents encouraged me:

8、“impossible is nothing, you could challenge yourself! So with the encouragement of them, I tried my best to run and insisted on running. When I got to the finishing line, I felt proud of myself. Though I didnt get a very good mark, I knew I had won. I created a miracle for myself and I was so proud

9、of myself,The wheel of life has rolled fast through the past fifteen years. By looking backwards, Im so proud of myself because Ive grown into a strong-minded person. It was the first time for me to climb a high mountain alone. At first, I felt my body was filled with energy. As time went by, tiredn

10、ess made my step slow down. For many times, the idea of giving up the journey appeared in my mind. But the saying “Accumulated water becomes a river.” enabled me to move on. Though the power of one step seemed so weak, I insisted on climbing to the top. When I succeeded, I felt I had reached a new h

11、eight in my life. How proud Im of being a strong-minded person,2011话题补全式作文 Write at least 60 words about the topic “Im a member of “ (以“我是的一员”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格子” 提示：你可以作为任意兴趣小组或者社团的一员，或者作为家庭，班级，社区额的一员，写出你的经历，感受等。 Use the following points as a reference Are you glad to be a member of ？ What do

12、you do in it? How do you feel as such a member,Im a Member of the Singing and Dancing Club Hello, everyone! Im very glad to be a member of the Singing and Dancing Club. I have been in this club for 2 years. Im an actor in the club. I like singing and dancing very much. I sing and dance with my class

13、mates on weekends. Though I am very tired, I like to sing and dance every day. It makes me feel very happy,In this world, every family has a mother, a father, a daughter or a son. For plenty of people, families are very important. When you are very said, you can found one or two persons to make you

14、feel happiness, this is your family. I am very gold to become my family member, because I have a pretty good parent and a fairly younger brother. When I come back, I always feel freedom and relaxed. My mother is a kind cook; she has lots of experience in cooking, so my brother and I are healthy. As

15、a daughter， I shouldnt make my parents worry .As a sister, l should look after my brother. I want to be a great member of my family; I would try my best to do what I should do in the family,2012书信类作文 Write a letter in at least 60 words according to the given situation(根据所给情景写一封不少于60词的信) Suppose you

16、are Joe. Your friend Betty is upset about a coming exam for she cares too much about the result. What do you think? Try to offer her some advice. (假设你是Joe，你的好朋友Betty因为过于在意考试结果而感到焦虑。请给他写一封信，谈谈你的看法，并给她一些建议,Knowing that you care too much about the result, I am quite worried. It is no use being upset de

17、spite the importance of the result. There are some effective ways to calm down. Above all, keeping reminding yourself to stay in peace is the most helpful. Besides, it will help you to relax if you spare some time for recreational activities like sports. Finally, talk to your parents and friends, wh

18、o are always ready to comfort you. As is said by Steve Jobs, “the journey is the reward.” I am sure you will get through this situation,Dear Betty, How time flies! The exam is finally near at hand. Important as it is to you, you really shouldnt care too much about the result and get yourself overly

19、upset. Remember all the hard work you have put in! As long as you go with a calm mind and a positive attitude, Im sure there will be nothing difficult for you and the exam will be smooth sailing. I suggest you talk more to parents and teachers about your anxiety and take better care of your health s

20、uch as getting enough sleep and doing more exercise. Above all, no matter what the result, all you need to do is to act more and think less because action is worrys worst enemy. Keep faith and calm down, and you are sure to come out with flying colors. All the best of luck. Yours, Joe,2013自由命题类作文 Wr

21、ite at least 60words about the topic “How to protect myself”(以“如何保护自己”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。) 提示： 自我保护是青少年需要掌握的重要技能。请谈谈你在生活中怎样进行自我保护(可结合生活中的某一个情景或具体事例，如：面对灾难如何自救，如何预防受骗或侵害，如何避免生活中的意外，等等)。 Phrases for reference(以下短语仅供参考)： Askfor help calm down in danger preventfrom (注意：文中不得出现具体人名、校名等个人信息，否则不予评分,As

22、 a student, I think it important for me to protect myself from dangerous situations. First of all, I must calm down as soon as possible, for panicking is of no help. Then, as is know to all, calling 119 immediately is the most effective way to save myself. As well as that, it is best to take the sta

23、irs instead of elevators. IN conclusion, with positive attitude and sufficient preparations, I will be able to protect myself from fires,How to protect myself Everyone in my family was awaked by the unusual shaking. The first word that came to my mind was earthquake. When I looked outside of the win

24、dow, I found everyone running here and there, and I could hear the shouting from the neighbors. Despite the fact that I was in danger, I told myself to calm down and think about the ways to protect myself in an earthquake. I should get outside instead of hiding inside the building. I couldnt take th

25、e lift but walk downstairs. No sooner had I got outside than I asked the police for help. And I should always be aware of the unexpected drop overhead. Following these ways, I managed to prevent myself from being hurt, and survived the earthquake. I believe that these are useful ways to protect myse

26、lf in an earthquake,2014年上海中考英语作文 Write at least 60 words about the topic “This time next year” (以“明年此时”为题， 写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格) 你是否想象过，明年此时，你的生活会发生怎样的变化？你对自己或他人有怎样的期待？ 你能为此做些什么？） The following sentence patterns are for reference only. ( 以下句型仅供参考) I hope to /I hope that. Perhaps I will. It will be

27、 exciting / necessary /terrible to,This Time Next Year Its exciting to imagine what the happy life will be like. At this time next year, I will be a senior high student, and I will make a lot of new friends. I hope to be more independent so that perhaps I will be taking part in a summer camp abroad

28、to improve my spoken English. Also I will help my parents do housework in order to know how to take care of myself when I am alone. Life will be totally different, but Im really looking forward to it,This Time Next Year Life is changeable, and thats why everyone longs for the future, which is full o

29、f challenge as well as hope. Perhaps I will have achieved my goal this time next year, studying in a senior high school. Despite that, diligence will be still needed to make myself go further in English. Basically, it is important to concentrate in class and take notes carefully. Then, I will benefi

30、t from reading English books. What is more, going abroad is of great use in improving my oral English. Only in this way can I progress in English endlessly. Make plans and go for what I want. And I believe when the challenge is coming, the hope is also around the corner,2015年中考英语作文 Write at least 60

31、 words on the topic “I want to invent _” (以“我想要发明_”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)（注意：1、在答题纸上将题目补充完整。 2、短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分 The following is for reference only. (以下表达仅供参考) It can be used to It will be exciting/necessary/helpful to,I want to invent a flying car It is not uncommon to meet traffic p

32、roblems and serious air pollution in big city. It is a must to have a plan to improve the serious condition. I get an idea to design my own flying machine like a car which can drive well in the street as well as fly between the high rises to avoid the traffic jam. Whats more, when it is moving, it c

33、an transform the motion energy into electricity to drive the engine. Thus, it is possible to save a lot of fuel and reduce the air pollution. It is of great use to solve the problems of traffic jam and air pollution, and even save the natural resource. Bright idea can only be achieved with the deter

34、mination and courage. I believe my idea will turn a new leaf of future life,I want to invent a time machine As a student who is experiencing unprecedented modern life nowadays, I would rather learn about the history and the future life of human being from a real experience than learn from a textbook

35、. Thats why if I can work as a great inventor, inventing a time machine will be my first choice. The most important usage of my time machine will be visiting one of best schools in Tang Dynasty. As we all know, Tang Dynasty is famous for its open-minded education. Therefore, when I visit the school

36、of the ancient city, I can not only try different ways of studying but communicate with people from different countries as well. Using a time machine is the most vivid way to learn history as it is both a record of mankind and a mirror of past, I am looking forward to the day when my time machine co

37、mes out,2016年中考英语作文 Write at least 60words on the topic “Im ready”（以“我准备好了”为题，写一篇不少 于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格） 你对明天一定有着美好的憧憬为此，你已经做好了哪方面的准备？请结合你的经历或特长 等，选取一个角度具体谈谈你是如何做准备的 （注意：短文中不得出现任何人名、学校及其它相关信息，否则不予评分） independentbe good at responsible take part in hardworking it helps me to,Im Ready I have always been l

38、onging for studying abroad, which is full of challenges as well as opportunities. Therefore, what I should do is to get ready anytime. As they say, chance favors the prepared mind. I always get myself ready both physically and mentally. First, I insist on taking exercise regularly to build up my bod

39、y. Besides, I spare no effort to learn English well in order to integrate into the new environment as soon as possible. Last but not least, it is necessary to cultivate a shiny optimistic attitude towards difficulties. With great passion and determination, I am well prepared and deeply convinced tha

40、t a challenging but fulfilling study life is waiting for me. (115 words,I am ready After working hard for so many years, I am ready for my senior high school life. The accumulation of all kinds of knowledge has already laid a solid foundation for my further study. In my free time, I read a lot of bo

41、oks, which largely broadens my horizon. What more, I take part in many activities and develop many hobbies. They both help me become more responsible and energetic than before. I am really looking forward to my new high school life and I am really,2017,Write at least 60 words on the topic “Theres al

42、ways hope”（以“常怀希望”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格） 面临困惑的时候、经历变化的时候、感觉挫败的时候、遭遇逆境的时候来自内心的坚持、他人的帮助、社会的关爱和科技的发展等，总能让人常怀希望。请选取一个方面谈谈你的理解（可结合自身或他人的经历）。 The following is for reference only （以下表达仅供参考） get out of difficulty give a hand never lose hope,There is no doubt that life is full of setbacks. Nevertheless, j

43、ust as the saying goes, “when god closes a door, he opens a window.” In the process of getting ready for this entrance exam, I was faced with many a difficulty, especially the physics. Frankly speaking, I tended to lose confidence in this subject for the sake of several bad results. Fortunately, at

44、this time, my teacher told me that I was supposed to face up to it. It was her encouragement that made me make up my mind to spare no effort to learn physics. Difficulty as it was, I have never given up since then. On all accounts, by no means should we be frustrated in that hardship is always accom

45、panied by hope,2018,Write at least 60 words on the topic “My progress” (以“进步了”为题,写一信不少于60个词的短文,标点符号不占格) 你在生活或学习中一定取得过不少进步,比如生活技能的获得、学习方法的掌握、良好习慣的养成。请选取其中一个方面,结合自身经历,谈一谈你是如何取得这一进步的。（注意:短文中不得出现任何人名、校名及其它相关信息,否则不予评分。) The following is for reference only(以下表达仅供参考) used to do/be try my best to do make pr

46、ogress in( doing,Not great as it is, Id like to share with you my progress in these three years. To be honest, I was not so good at my study when I came to junior high school, often feeling tired out and at a loss. Sometimes, I was even on the point of giving up. However, my change happened when my teachers as well as my classmates came to encourage me one day in Grade Eight. It was their encouragement and m